Markers’ Comments
Knowledge and Understanding
You have outlined what is meant by an effective professional relationship and the impotance of this kind of relationship. You have similarly identified elements of communication and attempted to discuss these in relation to patient care and the benefits of these in the nurse patient relationship.
You used some examples from practice to illustrate these aspects. The barriers to communication needed to be explored in a little more detail. It would have been useful to consider a reflective model in your discussion.
The use of so many quotes really hampered the overall structure of your work.
Thank you for the video and I hope you found the experience valuable
Discussion and Analysis
There was little analysis or discussion as you mainly used a lot of quotes. However, you did attempt to consider different patients, their health and cultural situation. You do need to try and summarise points in your own words. Next time compare and contrast different points of view and support these with references.
Academic Style
You have given an introduction, a conclusion and the main body of the essay is set out. You attempted discussions at times but this was limited. You have written in an academic style in the main for a 1st attempt at a lengthy essay. A fairly satisfactory piece of work, clear and coherent at times but more work in needed here on expressing your ideas clearer towards a more effective academic style.
Summary
In terms of your 1st attempt at writing a longer academic piece of work, this was a fair attempt. You do need to pay attention to referencing your work correctly and please do not use so many quotes in your work. You do need to try and summarise points in your own words.
Overall, a fair piece of work. Well done
Marker’s Name:
Dr Annette Chowthi-Williams
Date: 13th Feb 2022
Feed Forward
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https://library.roehampton.ac.uk/studytoolkit/studiosity
https://moodle.roehampton.ac.uk/course/view.php?id=3700
Moderator’s comments:
I agree with the Markers Grade and Comments.
Signature: Renate Taylor
Date: 17th Feb 23