University of Roehampton
Introduction to Public Health and Health Promotion
Nursing Programmes (Dept. of Life Sciences)
Group Presentations 6th and 8th June 2023 09.30-12.30
This form is for consideration of a live/face to face presentation by groups of
students and for a submitted Power Point Presentation.
Student Names Jeanette, Natalie, Olufunmilayo, Promise and Patrick.
Group Name 9
Module Name Introduction to Public Health and Health Promotion
Module Code NRS020C1035
Assignment title Group Project Presentation
Date of Submission 06/06/2023
Word Count N/A
Please consider whether the groups have included, NOT
included or partially included all of the requested work in
their group presentations. See marking criteria below.
Presentation Criteria Comments
1. Local area chosen with rationale. Including
demographics, socioeconomic factors and
health and wellbeing patterns. What are the
key determinants of health, illness and
wellbeing in this area?
(20 marks) 9
Brent, see below box for other
commentary.
2. Identify a health priority to focus on with
rationale, explored in depth
Identify common health inequalities and the
underlying reasons within this area and the
target group.
(20 marks) 8
Increased
teenage
pregnancy
rates.
Covered
poverty,
unemployment,
ONS data.
BAME groups,
Identified
educational
strategies. –
strategic
evaluation.
3. Identify a health promotion or public health
strategy to address the need. Explain why
this method has been chosen. Discuss the
approach to the strategy and how this can
be tailored to the specific individuals or
group identified.
(20 marks) 9
Speaks on current strategies to
manage TP in Brent-1988, to reduce in
the whole of the UK and therefore
Brent.
Causes of TP.
Increase full time education and
communicating with new teenage
parents.
4. Explain how the planning and delivery may
include service users, practice partners and
additional charities/groups if appropriate.
(20 marks) 8
Parents/Service users/Schools/social
media/Excluded from school.
5. Suggest how this project might be
evaluated.
(5 marks) 2
No mention of managing impact or
outcomes, effectiveness.
Requesting feedback after each art
and crafts session. Spoke of idle
minds. Arts and crafts to prevent
teenage pregnancy- write to the local
authorities- to find a venue.
6. Is presentation clear and easy to
understand, making appropriate use of
technology (power point). Is there a clear
structure? Is language appropriate and
fluent? Did the presentation take 20 minutes
to complete?
(5 marks) 2
PDF used.
Shows graphs from 2018 (ONS).
Patrick turned back on the audience.
7. Is there evidence of collaborative group
work with an equal contribution from each
group member?
(5 marks) 2
Not as smooth as other groups.
1 person (Olu) more of a
spokesperson.
Patrick also spoke up.
Jeanette- grew up in Brent, spoke of
activities in the local community
centers. Knife crime changed
everything- to offer more cooking
classes, aerobics and other activities.
8. Is there evidence of appropriate academic
style – supporting data, references cited,
structure, & grammar
(5 marks) 2
Some older data used. Have this group
looked a more updated data.
Referencing does not follow
guidelines.
Mark: 42%
Feedback from marker:
Knowledge and understanding, both verbal and written.
Poor evidence of up-to-date research around the health needs in Brent.
Data from the 1990s and early 2000s to provide the demographic and community profile.
Discussion and analysis, both verbal and written.
Covered what had been covered historically and nationally in Brent.
Referenced up to 2018- just too old.
The UK has the highest rates of TP in Europe- there will be more recent data than this to
present.
No mention of sexual health or contraception advice despite the health need identified.
Education strategy was carried out in Brent already.
Further detail around peer support or online support could have improved the
presentation.
Summary
The presentation met the threshold level of attainment of the learning outcomes has been
achieved.
The presentation was somewhat paternalistic. There was no evidence of how coproduction would take place with the client group. No clear evidence of how you would
evaluate the impact of the strategy which was historical anyway-you need to have thought
of an original idea.
Where is the evidence to say that activities for young people will reduce the numbers of
teenage pregnancies?
You will need to present a picture of health promotion intervention.
Missed opportunity to include partner agencies in the strategies.
Missed opportunity around a lack of curiosity about current data.
How will the audience consider relevance to the subject from older more historical data?
The group worked well together- good joined up thinking between the group. Good
consensus, so evidenced good all-round agreement.
Feed forward:
Please review cite them right as you have not followed the guidance correctly.
Assure evidence and data used is as up to date and current as possible.
Utilize the learning outcomes and marking criteria to help with organization and
discussion.
Marker name: Paulette Ragan
Date:06/06/2023
Feedback from Service Users/Carers (if appropriate)
You found the data needed – but consider the quality, age and relevance of that data.
Service Users/Carers name: Jacqueline Ewers
Date:06/06/2023
Moderator comments
Agree with comments above and grade given.
Date: 11/06/23 Beverley Brathwaite
100
92
85
Upper First – Work graded in this range demonstrates…
• Achievement beyond the attainment of intended learnin

Student name and ID number:
Patrick Mbomegue MBO13363243
Section: Comments:
General Score: 23/26
General: Systematic ABCDE approach evident
throughout. Well Done. Professional approach to
patient evident (PPE/Dignity acknowledged) but
sometimes you were also sometimes using
jargon/phrases that caused Sofia to worry e.g.
‘that is very low – alarming..’ – please have a think
about how you can develop this aspect of your
practice. Small inaccuracy on NEWs2 chart –
Air/Oxygen not charted– please review for future
practice.
Airway Score: 3 /6
Airway: Partial assessment of airway, but you
could have gone further here to evaluate e.g.
assessing for gurgling/snoring as well as stridor.
Clear articulation of airway patency based on
verbal response which was good
Breathing Score: 6 /13
Breathing: Relevant data considered & concern
noted. Some appropriate further assessments
suggested but there were no interventions
suggested here. It would be reasonable to check
target SpO2 & prescription with a view to giving
Oxygen therapy in these circumstances. It would
also be sensible to sit Sofia up to facilitate gas
exchange. Please review course materials on
interventions for breathing to develop your
practice.
Circulation Score: 13 /17
Circulation: Relevant data considered & concern
noted. Inaccurate technique for measuring CRT –
please review for future practice. Some
appropriate further assessments & interventions
suggested – e.g. ECG, 2 large cannulas, IVABs –
it would have been good to get the rest of the
Sepsis 6 bundle but you have done well here Well
Done. Please note that we would not usually give
1L/15mins as fluid challenge – this is too much it
would usually be 250-500mls.
Disability Score: 9 /13
Disability: A bit rushed here. Relevant data
considered. Concern acknowledged. Pain
assessment prompted analgesia which was good.
Exposure Score: 6 /7
Exposure: Relevant data considered & able to
pick up additional information during Exposure
about the wound which was good & prompted you
to suggest a wound dressing.
Other Score: 4 /7
Other:
Although explanations were provided to the
patient, it was often done in a way that caused her
to worry. Identified Sepsis as presentation with
some rationale but this would have benefitted
from a bit more development. Well Done
Summary Score: 6 /11
Summary: The SBAR was a bit inconsistent – the
headline was clear ‘NEWs =13’ which was good.
However, the information that you gave to support
was often vague & a bit confusing. You were able
to convey concern about Sepsis, which was good,
but I would recommend giving responders a
definite timeframe to attend within e.g. 10 minutes
rather than ASAP. This is something to keep
practising I think – on a practical note, it may be
worth writing the numbers of the observations
onto the chart so that you don’t doubt yourself in
the moment.
TOTAL SCORE: 70 /100
Overall Comments:
Well Done. A bit rushed but a systematic approach was evident with
relevant data considered in the correct sequence & some appropriate
generic interventions suggested. Breathing was much weaker than
other sections as you did not consider giving Oxygen – this is
something for you to review & develop in your future practice. You
were able to identify Sepsis as the presenting condition which is great
and identify some interventions relating to Sepsis 6 – it would have
been even better if you had remembered CRP, Cultures, VBG for
lactate but you did well here. Well Done. You were able to deliver care
efficiently, but I think this came at the cost of listening to Sofia’s
concerns – think about how you can develop this in future. SBAR
escalation would also benefit from a bit more attention & practice.
Overall, good job – it is evident that you have worked hard & achieved
the learning outcomes for the module.
Marker Name: Catherine Jones
Date: 9.5.24

Knowledge and understanding

Your work has covered a range of the module content to address the essay requirements and show knowledge and understanding of the concepts. Understanding of the chosen paper was demonstrated to some extent in the work although your three themes  could have been addressed with more depth.

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Discussion and analysis

There is a good level of discussion in the work with evidence of some  analysis in aspects of the work. You have presented some good points in the work to show knowledge of research in the work and needed to deveolp this further in the critique which needed more focussed discussion. Where you have discussed the EBP  you have given an example  of how this can be achieved in practice showing that you are linking theory to practice . The discussion on ethics did not fully develop as you  did not clearly ntegrate EBP in the discussions

Evidence of reading

You have presented an extensive reference list of current and up to date sources of literature which is good. However,  there was scope for you to use he evidence more effectively to develop the level of analysis in the work as this was not fully sustained.

Academic style (including referencing, structure, grammar)

Work is written in an acceptable academic style although you do need to pay attention to syntax as some sentences were unclear. Minor omissions evident in the reference list.

Summary

The work has addressed the learning outcomes for the module 

Feed Forward 

  There was potential for the work  to develop further  especially the level of analysis in the work as this was not fully sustained.  As you progress you need to develop your thinking beyond the  the guidlines as they are there to provide a basic guide to start your essay but you need to further develop your work to show higher order thinking. You mainly make statements from the evidence to make a point or give a view. To progress further you need to  apply the evidence through discussion of what the evidence is stating and how it links to concept or arguments being put forward by you.

 Proof read your work for errors with syntax and accuracy of your sources

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Signature (marker)

Mariama Seray-Wurie

Date

03/06/2024

Markers’ Comments

Knowledge and Understanding 

You have outlined what is meant by an effective professional relationship and the impotance of this kind of relationship. You have similarly identified elements of communication and  attempted to discuss these in relation to patient care and the benefits of these in the nurse patient relationship.

You used some examples  from practice to illustrate these aspects.  The barriers to communication needed to be explored in a little more detail. It would have been useful to consider a reflective model in your discussion.

The use of so many quotes really hampered the overall structure of your work. 

 Thank you for the video and I hope you found the experience valuable

Discussion and Analysis 

There was little analysis or discussion as you mainly used a lot of quotes. However, you did attempt to consider different patients, their health and cultural situation. You do need to try and summarise points in your own words. Next time compare and contrast different points of view and support these with references.

Academic Style

You have given an introduction, a conclusion and the main body of the essay is set out. You attempted discussions at times but this was limited. You have written in an academic style in the main for  a 1st attempt at a lengthy essay. A fairly satisfactory  piece of work, clear and coherent at times but more work in needed here on expressing your ideas clearer towards a more effective academic style.

Summary 

In terms of your 1^st attempt at writing a longer academic piece of work, this was a fair attempt. You do need to pay attention to referencing your work correctly and please do not use so many quotes in your work. You do need to try and summarise points in your own words. 

Overall, a fair piece of work. Well done

Marker’s Name: 

Dr Annette Chowthi-Williams

Date: 13^th Feb 2022 

Feed Forward 

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https://library.roehampton.ac.uk/studytoolkit/studiosity 

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 Moderator’s comments:

I agree with the Markers Grade and Comments.

Signature: Renate Taylor

Date: 17th Feb 23